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The broken mirror on the wall
Reflects my shattered life.
Never am I
Good enough
Pretty enough
Smart enough
Talented enough...
Only strong enough,
To get through the many
Dissapointments.
The emptiness I feel inside
Haunts me day and night.
My tear stained face,
Knotted hair,
Chubby legs and
Tiny feet
Stare back at me
Through the corrupted mirror
My life has become.
The faces of my friends and family,
Dissapointed,
Remind me of all my faults.
When?
When can I be good enough?
Pretty enough?
Smart enough?
Talented enough?
Desires overwhelm me,
Eternity
Happiness
Love
Death.
I'm in this world with billions of people,
Alone.
©2004-2010 ~ArtisticallyChalleng
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Author's Comments

A little something I wrote on the way to a track meet at Exeter Academy yesterday... realized everything and wanted to get it down onto paper, and want to know how it is... I appreciate all comments, just want to know what you think of it, good or bad, anything. thanks

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~Lecta May 9, 2004, 5:40:33 PM
very nice... I like it...
it shows so much emotion... very good

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and for some reason... here's a pirate :ahoy:
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~snapthefox May 9, 2004, 1:33:40 PM
nice work!!... very well writen, right to the point, great work!!^^

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This is what part of the alphabet would look like with out Q and R..


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~conskeptical May 9, 2004, 10:22:19 AM
it gets across your point pretty effectively, although i wouldn't say it was an especially elegant piece of poetry.
the listing technique is simple, but works. you paint a damning picture of yourself/the person in the poem. if it's you: :hug:
the astonishing thing is the number of people in the this world who are alone, despite being around so many people.
we just need to learn to connect, for our own sakes and the sakes of those around us :)
:peace: + :heart: = :D :community:
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~ArtisticallyChalleng May 9, 2004, 10:28:05 AM
Thanks!!! yea, I know, none of my poetry is really elegant, and typical poetry, and its simple and to the point, but, I'm not very elegant, so therefore I guess it reflects myself... haha. Thanks for your comment, and thanks for the hug... it was written as first person for a reason...
:hug:
~Glyn

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"Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die tomorrow." ~James Dean

:flagcanada: + :shamrock:
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~conskeptical May 9, 2004, 10:41:00 AM
well, what can i say?
...elegance isn't the only positive attribute :)
there's plenty of negatives in the world, but there's plenty of positives too. it's good to keep them in balance :D
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